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In my opinion, the most common compliment in Korea is the appearance compliment.

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In my opinion, the most common compliment in Korea is the appearance compliment.
I think Korea should be pretty.
I think they often like Barbie's body and celebrity-like appearances.
Therefore, they tend to disparage other people's appearance and make them look higher.
I think it's my usual complex of looks in Korea.
Maybe that's why there are many compliments about appearance in our country.
For example, there are many compliments such as "pretty face" and "good body."
Of course, this is my opinion, but this culture is not good for us because people have low self-esteem and children start by disparaging themselves if they look a little different from the media's idols.

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Hi Da Hye,

Great job on sharing your thoughts and observations about compliments and appearance in Korea! You've provided some interesting insights into the cultural dynamics surrounding beauty standards. One aspect you highlighted is the prevalence of appearance compliments in Korea. This demonstrates your awareness of the common trend and the importance people place on physical beauty. You also mentioned the preference for Barbie-like figures and celebrity-like appearances. This shows your understanding of the specific ideals that are often admired in Korean society. Moreover, you pointed out that this emphasis on appearance can lead to the disparagement of others and the creation of unrealistic standards. It's commendable that you recognize the potential negative impact of such attitudes and the effect they can have on individuals' self-esteem. To further improve your essay, you may consider adding some action points or suggestions for fostering a healthier and more inclusive culture. For example, you could explore promoting self-acceptance, embracing diversity, or encouraging positive body image. By offering constructive ideas, you can contribute to a more positive outlook and potentially inspire change. Overall, your essay displays critical thinking and awareness of the impact of beauty standards. Your perspective on the topic is valuable, and your willingness to discuss the potential drawbacks of appearance-focused compliments is commendable. Keep up the excellent work!

~Teacher Cathy

 

In my opinion, the most common compliment in Korea is the appearance compliment.

>>In my opinion, the most common compliment in Korea is related to appearance.
I think Korea should be pretty.

>>I believe that in Korea, physical beauty is highly valued.

OR>> I think Koreans should be pretty.
I think they often like Barbie's body and celebrity-like appearances.

>>CORRECT

OR>>It seems that people often admire Barbie-like figures and celebrity-like appearances.
Therefore, they tend to disparage other people's appearance and make them look higher.

>>CORRECT

OR>>As a result, they tend to belittle others' appearances and elevate certain standards.
I think it's my usual complex of looks in Korea.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Personally, I find this emphasis on looks to be a common issue in Korea.
Maybe that's why there are many compliments about appearance in our country.

>> Maybe that's why there are many compliments about our appearance in our country.

OR>>Perhaps that's why there are numerous compliments focused on physical appearance in our country.
For example, there are many compliments such as "pretty face" and "good body."

>>CORRECT

OR>>For instance, people frequently compliment others by saying "pretty face" or "good body."
Of course, this is my opinion, but this culture is not good for us because people have low self-esteem and children start by disparaging themselves if they look a little different from the media's idols.

>>CORRECT

OR>>While this is solely my perspective, I believe that this cultural phenomenon is detrimental to us as it contributes to low self-esteem among individuals. Additionally, children may start criticizing themselves if they do not resemble the media's idols.

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