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Hello.
How was your day?
I am totally exhausted today.
One of our Franchise doctor came to our clinic this morning.
I showed my treatments to him all this morning.
And, I had to finish organizing the salaries of all staff.
There were a lot of patients and clients this afternoon though.
There were also many complaints because of long waiting.
I had a hard time to keep my mental status.
Anyway, I completed all my work successfully.
And then, as you expected, I drank some whiskey at home.
It made me relax.
Regarding my homework, it is too difficult to remember the last invitation.
I guess when my senior doctor invited me to his house was the last time.
His nickname is "The king of invitation"
Actually, we were supposed to meet and play together on last Children's day.
However, we didn't make it because of much rain.
He likes to invite many people to his house every weekend.
Fortunately, his wife is the same kind of person.
Maybe, I will invite his family to my house next time.
See you.

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Good morning, Dr. Kim!

It was a very challenging day yesterday because my city did not have popwer supply for the whole day. Nevertheless, I had a very sweet slep in the afternoon. As a result, today, I feel so energized! How is your day so far? I hpe that the meeting with the marketing manager will be just fine. Yesterday seems like a busy day when Dr. MJ is smiling due to the number of patients coming in your doorsteps. As I observed, when you had a lot of things to do in a day, you reward yourself with somewhiskey in the evening. Fair enough.

In life, we will receive so many invitations good and bad- weddings, birthdays, anniversaries, funeral, among others. In the same way, we also invite people dear to us. It means that someone has remembered us and would appreciate our presence on an important occasion. Accepting the invitation gives a good impression of the invitation.

Here on your homework, almost all of your sentences were written correctly. The suggestions are very few so make sur to understand the reason why they were made. You did an excellent composition!

See you in class.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

I am totally exhausted today.
>> Correct!

One of our Franchise doctor came to our clinic this morning.
>> One of our franchise doctors came to our clinic this morning.

I showed my treatments to him all this morning.
>> I showed my treatments to him the entire morning.

And, I had to finish organizing the salaries of all staff.
>> Correct!

There were a lot of patients and clients this afternoon though.
>> Correct!

There were also many complaints because of long waiting.
>> Correct!

I had a hard time to keep my mental status.
>> Correct!

Anyway, I completed all my work successfully.
>> Correct!

And then, as you expected, I drank some whiskey at home.
>> Correct!

It made me relax.
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, it is too difficult to remember the last invitation.
>> Correct!

I guess when my senior doctor invited me to his house was the last time.
>> Correct!

His nickname is "The king of invitation"
>> Correct!
Or: His nickname is "The King of Invitation".

Actually, we were supposed to meet and play together on last Children's day.
>> Actually, we were supposed to meet and play together (on/last) Children's Day.

However, we didn't make it because of much rain.
>> Correct!

He likes to invite many people to his house every weekend.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, his wife is the same kind of person.
>> Correct!

Maybe, I will invite his family to my house next time.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!

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