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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What hobbies are popular with children, but not with adults?


Although it's popularity have decreased these days, It's hobby that is consistently popular with children.
The hobby is making slime.
Slime is a sticky, moist liquid, fluffy like jelly toy.
When I was young I used to play this toy, but now it's become more popular.
In addition, there is a slime cafe.
Maybe, I think it's the influence of various social media.
Children like to make and touch things using hand.
So slime with various touches is popular.
But, It's not popular with adults.
When I play this toy, other people think is as childish or ridiculous to play with toys.
That's okay, I don't care because I very sometimes remember or buy toys that I played with when I was young.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What hobbies are popular with children, but not with adults?



Although it's popularity have decreased these days, It's hobby that is consistently popular with children.
>> Although it's popularity has decreased these days, this is a hobby that is consistently popular with children.
The hobby is making slime.
>> CORRECT! 
Slime is a sticky, moist liquid, fluffy like jelly toy.
>> CORRECT! 
When I was young I used to play this toy, but now it's become more popular.
>> When I was young I used to play this toy, but now it has become more popular.
In addition, there is a slime cafe.
>> CORRECT! 
Maybe, I think it's the influence of various social media.
>> Maybe, I think it's the influence of various social media platforms.
Children like to make and touch things using hand.
>> Children like to make and touch things using their hands.
So slime with various touches is popular.
>> CORRECT! 
But, It's not popular with adults.
>> But, it's not popular with adults.
When I play this toy, other people think is as childish or ridiculous to play with toys.
>> When I play this toy, other people think of it as childish or ridiculous to play with toys.
That's okay, I don't care because I very sometimes remember or buy toys that I played with when I was young.
>> That's okay, I don't care because I sometimes remember or buy toys that I played when I was young.
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