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Yes they do. First of all, I am a firstborn, so my parents depend on me more than my sister. They hope that I studied well and be nice to other people. Because of their reliance, I always tried to be a nice guy. These days, they don¡¯t that much expect to me. They want for me to graduate university and get a job, though.

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Happy Wednesday, Robin.
I seldom see this in Korean dramas where families rely on their eldest son and think highly of them. It is nice that even though your parents have expectations from you, they don't force or pressure you so you can still enjoy life.
-T. Caitlyn
Yes they do. 
>> CORRECT
First of all, I am a firstborn, so my parents depend on me more than my sister. 
>> CORRECT
They hope that I studied well and be nice to other people. 
>> They hope that I will study well and will be nice to other people.
Because of their reliance, I always tried to be a nice guy. 
>> Because they relied on me, I always tried to be a nice person.
These days, they don¡¯t that much expect to me. 
>> These days, they don't expect that much from me.
They want for me to graduate university and get a job, though.
>> CORRECT
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