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Hi, T.Donna.
As I expected, I had a hectic day.
Since I had to confirm our staff's salaries, of course, during my worktime, I was so busy.
There was a bad happening.
One client who got a procedure several days ago posted the detail about the dissatisfaction on famous website.
She even lied too much, so we couln't agree with her.
I let my marketing manager request blocking the post to website, and we succeeded it.
In spite of my teaching, all staff still didn't know how to deal with a problem about private insurance, so I was a little disappointed with that.
However, we should offer more education, because we don't have another choice.
As for my assignment, I prefer talking directly than writing.
We can express our thought and emotion with our voice tone, accent, and impression.
One word can have different nuances in other situations.
Writing isn't enough to include those kinds of things.
But, since I worked with Dr. MJ for a long time, I got the hang of writings somewhat.
See you.

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Good morning, Dr. Kim!

As you have explained and expounded in class on what happened to your client who had a misunderstanding about your procedure and exposed her complaints on social media, in the first place, she should have consulted you first regarding the matter. So many people complain to social media thinking that their problems will be solved to no avail. It aggravated your clinic and her condition as well because the complaint causes more problems.

Meanwhile, stay patient in teaching and gently reminding your staff about insurance policies. Have them printed and hang on their staff room for reminders.

Finally, I agree that there is no substitute in communication better than speaking with a person face to face. We can see their facial expressions, we can hear their voice, among many other speaking points. Moreover, if they do not want to communicate, we can also determine what they mean. 

Your composition below shows a strong mastery of grammar and vocabulary. Your conjunctions, transitions, and word order are impressive. See you on the next composition! Keep up the good work!

Have a great day!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T.Donna.
>>  Correct!

As I expected, I had a hectic day.
>> Correct!

Since I had to confirm our staff's salaries, of course, during my worktime, I was so busy.
>>  Correct!

There was a bad happening.
>>  Correct!

One client who got a procedure several days ago posted the detail about the dissatisfaction on famous website.
>> One client who got a procedure several days ago posted the detail about the dissatisfaction on a famous website.

She even lied too much, so we couln't agree with her.
>> Correct!

I let my marketing manager request blocking the post to website, and we succeeded it.
>> I let my marketing manager request blocking the post to the website, and we succeeded.

In spite of my teaching, all staff still didn't know how to deal with a problem about private insurance, so I was a little disappointed with that.
>> Correct!

However, we should offer more education, because we don't have another choice.
>> Correct!

As for my assignment, I prefer talking directly than writing.
>> Correct!

We can express our thought and emotion with our voice tone, accent, and impression.
>> Correct!
Or: We can express our thoughts and emotions with our voice tone, accent, and impression.

One word can have different nuances in other situations.
>> Correct!

Writing isn't enough to include those kinds of things.
>> Correct!

But, since I worked with Dr. MJ for a long time, I got the hang of writings somewhat.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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