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What is the most positive change you have experienced in your life?

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I've been many countries
I always harded because I can't speak English a little
I felt that English is very important
I must speak English
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This is the most positive change I've ever experienced

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Wonderful Monday, Kay! If it is your dream to change the world, then keep learning. Education is the most efficient key to effect the change you desire to see in the world. The more you keep learning the more you discover new things and explore new opportunities. 

I've been many countries
>>> I've been to many countries.

I always harded because I can't speak English a little
>>> I always felt bad because I couldn't speak English a little.

I felt that English is very important
>>> I feel that English is very important.

I must speak English
>>> CORRECT.

So I started English
>>> So I started learning English.

This is the most positive change I've ever experienced
>>> This is the most positive change I've ever experienced.
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