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What is the most positive change you have experienced in your life?

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Hmmmmm you know? I tend to think about negative things, when I was very tired, it doesn't go well as I thought, and I got failed about the exam or interview. After then, I think that's not fair in the world. But, if I got passed anything as the exam, interview like this. It feels like I get compensation as I've been doing hard so that I should achieve something. So, it pushs me to the next step with positive mind. :)

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Wonderful Monday, Elic! If it is your dream to change the world, then keep learning. Education is the most efficient key to effect the change you desire to see in the world. The more you keep learning the more you discover new things and explore new opportunities. 

Hmmmmm you know? I tend to think about negative things, when I was very tired, it doesn't go well as I thought, and I got failed about the exam or interview.
>>> You know what? I tend to think about negative things when I'm very tired. Things don't go as well as I thought, and in addition to that, I recently failed an exam and interview.

After then, I think that's not fair in the world.
>>> After that, I think that's unfair.

But, if I got passed anything as the exam, interview like this. It feels like I get compensation as I've been doing hard so that I should achieve something.
>>> But if I passed the exam and interview. It feels like I get a compensation, as I've been working hard so that I should achieve something.

So, it pushs me to the next step with positive mind. :)
>>>  So, it pushes me to the next step with a positive mind.
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