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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think some people love to try extreme activities?


The reason why some people enjoy extreme activities This is because it is experience and a felling that
is difficult to feel often.
Unlike the mundane routine, it is rare to make me extreme fear and nervous.
So, some people like extreme activities like roller coasters, bungee jumping, paragliding.
These extreme activities are good too, but I'd prefer to less scare activities.
Someday I want to experience activities such as scuba diving and jet skiing.
I think it'll be less scary these activities.
I'm a easily scared. so I take a long time to adapt to extreme activities.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think some people love to try extreme activities?



The reason why some people enjoy extreme activities This is because it is experience and a felling that
is difficult to feel often.
>> The reason why some people enjoy extreme activities is because it is a different experience and a feeling that is difficult to feel often.
Unlike the mundane routine, it is rare to make me extreme fear and nervous.
>> Unlike the mundane routine, it is rare to make me feel extreme fear and nervousness.
So, some people like extreme activities like roller coasters, bungee jumping, paragliding.
>> So, some people like extreme activities like roller coasters, bungee jumping, and paragliding.
These extreme activities are good too, but I'd prefer to less scare activities.
>> These extreme activities are good too, but I'd prefer to do less scary activities.
Someday I want to experience activities such as scuba diving and jet skiing.
>> CORRECT! 
I think it'll be less scary these activities.
>> I think it'll be less scary to do these activities.
I'm a easily scared. so I take a long time to adapt to extreme activities.
>> I easily feel scared, so I take a long time to adapt to extreme activities.

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