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Do you think we should still invest in rocket launches, considering the excessive amount of money it

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"When something is important enough, you do it even if the odds are not in your favor"(Elon Musk). Well, I was a person who believed spending money just for rocket launches is a really meaningless thing to do. However, our earth has been destroyed and collapsed because of global warming, climate change, too many man-made things, etc. In other words, the earth will no longer exist. So, if humans want to live after the Earth no more existed, living on Mars or another planet is the only way to continue our generation. That means we need to think really cleverly about rocket launches whether it takes a lot of money. Also, money is required for all things; even if a tiny thing to do. A large amount of money will spend on rocket launches; however, when we think about a further future, our generation and lives are more important and valuable compared to money. In conclusion, I believe we should invest and fund rocket launches in order to continue our generation.

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Great insight, Su A! I think it's a refreshing perspective, as some people might say the opposing answer, and the way you explained it was neatly done.  Perhaps all those money could've been used for different purposes if this was decades ago, but considering the present day, it's undeniable that we have to take high risks for high rewards~
~T.Harmony <3

"When something is important enough, you do it even if the odds are not in your favor"(Elon Musk). 
>> CORRECT!
Well, I was a person who believed spending money just for rocket launches is a really meaningless thing to do. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> ...a person who used to believe that spending...
However, our earth has been destroyed and collapsed because of global warming, climate change, too many man-made things, etc. 
>> ... and has collapsed...
In other words, the earth will no longer exist. 
>> CORRECT!
So, if humans want to live after the Earth no more existed, living on Mars or another planet is the only way to continue our generation. 
>> ...after the Earth has no longer existed,...
That means we need to think really cleverly about rocket launches whether it takes a lot of money. 
>> ...rocket launches regardless if it costs a lot of money.
Also, money is required for all things; even if a tiny thing to do. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> Money is a necessity;...
A large amount of money will spend on rocket launches; however, when we think about a further future, our generation and lives are more important and valuable compared to money. 
>> CORRECT!
In conclusion, I believe we should invest and fund rocket launches in order to continue our generation.
>> CORRECT!
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