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What do you think is the common cause of obesity?

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I think psychological problems are the most common cause of obesity.
The stress from loneliness, lack, pressure release anti-stress hormones. That kinds of hormones cause overeating. A few times of overeating makes people more stressful, which in turns creates a cycle that leads to overeating. For example, just before my period, I can not stop to eat food which are salty, hot and sweet even I don't like sweet tasty normally. After I eat all of I want to eat, I felt guilty and get a lot of stress. Those stress make me become lethargic. So, I don't go out of my bed. I do just lie down on my bed and kill the time.

Also, unnecessary intake is another reason. Adult body doesn't need much as young children they don't spend energy to grow up. And people's activity decreases with age. However, many people eat the same amount of food as they did in their teens and twenties.

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Thank you for your homework, Jessica!

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I think psychological problems are the most common cause of obesity.

>>Correct
The stress from loneliness, lack, pressure release anti-stress hormones. 

>>The stress from loneliness, lack and pressure releases anti-stress hormones.

That kinds of hormones cause overeating. 

>>Those kinds of hormones cause overreacting.

A few times of overeating makes people more stressful, which in turns creates a cycle that leads to overeating.

>>A few times of overreacting makes people more stressful which creates a cycle that leads to overreacting.

 For example, just before my period, I can not stop to eat food which are salty, hot and sweet even I don't like sweet tasty normally. 

>>For example, just before my period, I can't stop eating food which are salty, hot and sweet even if I don't normally like sweet food.

After I eat all of I want to eat, I felt guilty and get a lot of stress.

>>After eating all the food that I want to eat, I felt guilty and I was stressed.

Those stress make me become lethargic. 

>>Correct

So, I don't go out of my bed. 

>>So, I don't get up from my bed.

I do just lie down on my bed and kill the time.

>>I just lie down on my bed and kill the time.

Also, unnecessary intake is another reason. 

>>Correct.

Adult body doesn't need much as young children they don't spend energy to grow up. 

>>Adult body doesn't need as much as young children's body to have more energy growing up.

And people's activity decreases with age. 

>>Correct.

However, many people eat the same amount of food as they did in their teens and twenties.

>>Correct

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