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작성자: 김*우
2023-04-30 1068

회원님의 영작문

Hello, T.Donna.
It's Sunday and I'm working in the clinic, despite of the best weather.
However I am excited, because tomorrow is the holiday "Labor Day".
After about 2 months, it's my first day-off.
Lately, my friend, who is an OS doctor, is going through a hard time about the relationship between his wife and him.
He considered a divorce seriously.
He told me that he had no choice but get divorce.
But, I disagreed him, because I know that he still loves his wife so much.
Recently, I've heard many news about bad relationships between my friends and their wives.
I am talking with him through the text now.
He was frustrated that he would lose his wife.
For me, marriage means stability.
Unless I argue with my wife, I always fell comfortable and fullness.
According to your advice, I try to listen to CNN news everyday.
As you know, I really want to improve my English.
Have a nice weekend.
See you tomorrow.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, good evening, Dr. Kim!

By this time, you are home getting dinner and enjoying whiskey a little later. You deserve to celebrate Labor Day since you work to the best of your abilities. Your profit and continuous patronage of your clients are testimony of this.

If your doctor friends are the same age or older than you, according to a data I read, in 2021, the average age of divorce for South Korean women was 46.8 years, while for South Korean men it was 50.1 years. Perhaps, getting married after 10 years is totally over the honeymoon stage and the differences are highlighted more in this stage of marriage.  In your friend's case, it can be devastating to have divorce when he still loves his wife but has to let go. Of course, again, we cannot truly know the real score of their decision to leave their marriage behind. We can only guess that one or both of them are no longer happy being married.

I fondly hope, as you made your vows with your wife: to have and to hold, for better or for worse, for richer, for poorer, in sickness and in health, to love and to cherish, until death do you part, that you will both be true to your promise. 

Please share in class what you listened to the CNN report today to see if you analyzed some information you heard.

The frequency of your correct sentences is very good. Look into some suggestions I made to some of them. Overall, you expressed your ideas excellently.

See you on Labor Day!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It's Sunday and I'm working in the clinic, despite of the best weather.
>> Correct!
Or: It's Sunday and I'm working in the clinic, despite of the very good weather.

However I am excited, because tomorrow is the holiday "Labor Day".
>> Correct!
Or: However I am excited, because tomorrow is Labor Day.

After about 2 months, it's my first day-off.
>> Correct!
Or: 2 -> two

Lately, my friend, who is an OS doctor, is going through a hard time about the relationship between his wife and him.
>> Correct!

He considered a divorce seriously.
>> Correct!
Or: He is seriously considering a divorce.

He told me that he had no choice but get divorce.
>> Correct!

But, I disagreed him, because I know that he still loves his wife so much.
>> But, I disagreed with him because I know that he still loves his wife so much.

Recently, I've heard many news about bad relationships between my friends and their wives.
>> Correct!

I am talking with him through the text now.
>> Correct!

He was frustrated that he would lose his wife.
>> Correct!

For me, marriage means stability.
>> Correct!

Unless I argue with my wife, I always fell comfortable and fullness.
>> Correct!

According to your advice, I try to listen to CNN news everyday.
>> Correct!

As you know, I really want to improve my English.
>> Correct!

Have a nice weekend.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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