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It is not good change all cars electronic.
Because it causes more environmental pollution.
The car is environment but the car making system is not.
And also it is dangerous when the electronic cars being fire. The fire is burning, not extingusing.
So it is not good think that changing all cars by electronic.

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It is not good change all cars electronic.

>>It is not good to switch to electronic cars.
Because it causes more environmental pollution.

>>Because it causes more environmental pollutions.
The car is environment but the car making system is not.

>>The car itself is environmental but the car making system is not.
And also it is dangerous when the electronic cars being fire. 

>>And also, it is dangerous when electronic cars start a fire.

The fire is burning, not extingusing.

>>The fire will cause more damage.

So it is not good think that changing all cars by electronic.

>>So it is not good to change all cars to electronic cars.

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