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Can stress be a positive thing? in what situations?

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2023-04-26 1458

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Stress can be a positive thing sometimes.
Almost everyone think about that stress is harmful but I think stress can be motivated something.
I usually don't get stressed easily and I can forget bad things soon so I don't know how harmful it is..
So this is just an example. If I applied for jobs and failed from all of the jobs that I applied for, I would get stressed.
Then some people may stop doing something meaningful and just drink some alcohol.
But the others don't want to get stressed and may have passion for doing more things that can be effective for getting a job.
So I mean everybody has to change stress into passion. It can be happened to me.
If I am disappointed about a lot of failures, I should use those experiences a foothold.

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Hello Gem!
That's a really positive way of thinking. I totally agree that we can turn stress into a useful tool. Thanks for the efforts today. You were brilliant! See you tomorrow!
~~Teacher Kate 

Stress can be a positive thing sometimes.
>>CORRECT!
Almost everyone think about that stress is harmful but I think stress can be motivated something.
>>Almost everyone thinks that stress is harmful but I think stress can be something that motivates us.
I usually don't get stressed easily and I can forget bad things soon so I don't know how harmful it is.
>>CORRECT! (NOTE: Wow! That's amazing! )
So this is just an example. 
>>CORRECT!
If I applied for jobs and failed from all of the jobs that I applied for, I would get stressed.
>>If I applied for jobs and failed to get all of the jobs that I applied for, I would get stressed.
Then some people may stop doing something meaningful and just drink some alcohol.
>>CORRECT!
But the others don't want to get stressed and may have passion for doing more things that can be effective for getting a job.
>>CORRECT!
So I mean everybody has to change stress into passion. It can be happened to me.
>>So I mean everybody has to convert stress into passion. It can happen me.
If I am disappointed about a lot of failures, I should use those experiences a foothold.
>>If I am disappointed about a lot of failures, I should use those experiences as a foothold.

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