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Of course, I think there should be strict rules.
As you can see in various news and movies, most of the money is invested by other people and it has to be returned in the end, so illegal things naturally happen.

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I hope you are having a great day, Jade!
Thank you for always showing enthusiasm in this class by doing your homework. I always told you that practice gives way to progress. Keep up the good work!
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Of course, I think there should be strict rules.
>>> CORRECT!

As you can see in various news and movies, most of the money is invested by other people and it has to be returned in the end, so illegal things naturally happen.
>>> CORRECT!
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