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Privacy is very important.
Because even if family, they don¡¯t have to know everything.
It is good to have some secret.
If it is too much it is not good, but proper secret is good. Like dating with person.
Person between person has need to some distance.
It is good relationship.

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Thank you for your homework, Ye Lim!

You are doing great! 

-Hanna ^^

Privacy is very important.

>>Correct
Because even if family, they don¡¯t have to know everything.

>>Because even our families don't have to know everything.
It is good to have some secret.

>>It is good to have some secrets.
If it is too much it is not good, but proper secret is good.

>>Keeping too much secret is not good so we must limit it too. 

Like dating with person.

>>Just like dating with a person.
Person between person has need to some distance.

>>Relationships between to people must have a privacy.
It is good relationship.

>>It is good for the relationship.

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