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Oh my!
My assignment file was deleted by mistake just before.
I should've saved the file.
However, it is okay, because writing always makes me happy.
There was nothing special happening in the clinic.
There are still some time left before the closing, though.
Meanwhile, there's some good news.
Dr MJ and I decided to take a rest once a week starting this June.
You probably know how much I wanted to take a rest.
And, My car needs to be washed, both inside and outside.
Thus I found out the store, which can be done, and then completed the booking tomorrow.
These days, my blood sugar level was somewhat high, so I'm worrying about it.
You know that I like to drink whiskey with some delicious foods every night.
However, I have to avoid it at least a few days for my health.
When I was young, I never had enough money, so I wanted to make more money.
In spite of the large amount of debt, now I can purchase gadgets and delicous foods, and I am fully satisfied with this.
See you.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

Sometimes, things happen when we least expect them. It is a great joy to learn that you love writing after all. Doing it all over again is a piece of cake for you.
Taking breaks has been vital in recovering from stress which can, in turn, improve your performance. Recovering from work stress can restore energy and mental resources and decrease the development of fatigue, sleep disorders and cardiovascular diseases. As a doctor, you already know these. Your decision to take a break once a week is the best you can do for yourselves. Now, you can get a very good car wash, have time with your wife, your kids, and for yourself.  

Dreams are for free and it is up to our mindset if we achieve them. They push us to our limits because dreams demand hard work and commitment. Your dream to enjoy good meals every time can come true, with a catch- your blood sugar level. Eat, drink, be merry and do these moderately.

The grammar suggestions are just on simple punctuation marks, diction, and pronouns. Read them carefully below. Thank you for rewriting your composition after a technical glitch.

See you in class tomorrow.

-T. Donna~

Oh my!
>> Correct!

My assignment file was deleted by mistake just before.
>> My assignment file was deleted by mistake just before submission.

I should've saved the file.
>> Correct!

However, it is okay, because writing always makes me happy.
>> Correct!

There was nothing special happening in the clinic.
>> Correct!

There are still some time left before the closing, though.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, there's some good news.
>> Correct!

Dr MJ and I decided to take a rest once a week starting this June.
>> Correct!
Or: Dr. MJ

You probably know how much I wanted to take a rest.
>> Correct!

And, My car needs to be washed, both inside and outside.
>> Correct!
Or: And, my car...

Thus I found out the store, which can be done, and then completed the booking tomorrow.
>> Thus I found out the shop, which it can be done, and then completed the booking tomorrow.

These days, my blood sugar level was somewhat high, so I'm worrying about it.
>> Correct!

You know that I like to drink whiskey with some delicious foods every night.
>> Correct!

However, I have to avoid it at least a few days for my health.
>> Correct!

When I was young, I never had enough money, so I wanted to make more money.
>> Correct!

In spite of the large amount of debt, now I can purchase gadgets and delicous foods, and I am fully satisfied with this.
>> Correct!
Or: delicious

See you.
>> Correct!
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