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I like to have a family gathering on weekend. My family and I always work on weekday, so it¡¯s difficult to adjust a schedule. On weekend, we can eat delicious lunch together and go new cafe. As a result, I prefer weekend because I can spend time longer with my family.

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Happy Monday, Robin!
I agree with you. Spending time with the family on weekends or days when you are not busy is better than just squeezing it into your schedule because you can enjoy more and there is no need to rush.
-T. Caitlyn
I like to have a family gathering on weekend. 
>> I like to have family gatherings on weekends.
My family and I always work on weekday, so it¡¯s difficult to adjust a schedule. 
>> My family and I always work on weekdays, so it¡¯s difficult to adjust our schedule. 
On weekend, we can eat delicious lunch together and go new cafe. 
>> On weekends, we can eat delicious lunch together and go to new cafes. 
As a result, I prefer weekend because I can spend time longer with my family.
>> As a result, I prefer weekends because I can spend time longer with my family.
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