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Most of the means of transportation in our city are cars, buses and subways.
There are a lot of cars compared to the size of the city, so it's crowded during rush hour or on weekends.
So, while the transportation is convenient, it is not good because it is crowded.

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Most of the means of transportation in our city are cars, buses, and subways.
>>> CORRECT!

There are a lot of cars compared to the size of the city, so it's crowded during rush hour or on weekends.
>>> CORRECT!

So, while the transportation is convenient, it is not good because it is crowded.
>>> So, while the transportation is convenient, it also has a negative side because it is crowded.
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