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Hello,T Donna.
Actually, I've done with my essay just before.
However something more happened, so I'm writing my essay again.
Since I didn't have enough sleep, I was so tired this morning.
Thus, I was so sensitive, and ended up arguing with Dr MJ.
You don't worry about it.
We know each other well, so we'll make up with soon.
Meanwhile, my wife's parents was supposed to come to my house to help a Tomorrow's movement.
But, something happened, and only mother came to my house.
Can you guess why?
We planned to eat some delicious food in the Chinese restaurant near a new house, but now we can't do that.
Maybe we can order some kind of delicious food instead, and then I can enjoy my whiskey with the food.
Of course, I have to drink a little, because Tomorrow will be a hectic day for all of us.
Regarding my assignment, nothing comes to mind about my childhood.
When I was young, I always didn't have enough money, so I couldn't get any gadgets what I want to.
How poor.
See you tomorrow.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

It seems like you were less busy during day time at work so you were able to accomplish your essay early yesterday. I hope that you were able to patch things up with Dr. MJ. I guess, he feels scared when he argues with you. After all, you are the only person who truly understands and cares for him. Stay patient and understanding. More importantly, slep well and rest at a regular time pattern.

Whatever the reason, cancelling plans can be awkward and uncomfortable.  Being cancelled on is inevitable. However, maintaining a good attitude is important even if cancelled plans may evoke feelings of disappointment. I am sure you can make up something sumptuous and healthy for all of you.

As I menioned in class, there were less gadgets before. We played under the sun with other kids aside from our siblings. Fastforward now, we have less time to play and work occupies most of our time. It can be very strssful at times. Our childhood can remind us to lossen up a bit and think like a child who is simply enjoying the moment without worries and tensed feelings. Perhaps, the reason why most of us do not enjoy the daily activities is the lack of energy, fun, and curiosity as a child.  Never lose the inner kid in you and your life will be so much better.

Thank you for waiting for the comments and suggestions for this composition. You have done it twice within the day and I really appreciate the dedication you have put to your work. You used new expressions and your ideas remain clear and organized overtime. Keep it up!

See you next week! 

-T. Donna~

Hello,T Donna.
>> Correct!

Actually, I've done with my essay just before.
>> Actually, I'm done with my essay early today.

However something more happened, so I'm writing my essay again.
>> Correct!

Since I didn't have enough sleep, I was so tired this morning.
>> Correct!

Thus, I was so sensitive, and ended up arguing with Dr MJ.
>> Correct!

You don't worry about it.
>> Don't worry about it.

We know each other well, so we'll make up with soon.
>> We know each other well, so we'll make it up soon.

Meanwhile, my wife's parents was supposed to come to my house to help a Tomorrow's movement.
>> Meanwhile, my wife's parents were supposed to come to my house to help for tomorrow's movement.

But, something happened, and only mother came to my house.
>> But, something happened, and only my mother-in-law came to my house.

Can you guess why?
>> Correct!

We planned to eat some delicious food in the Chinese restaurant near a new house, but now we can't do that.
>> We planned to eat some delicious food in the Chinese restaurant near the new house, but now we can't do that.

Maybe we can order some kind of delicious food instead, and then I can enjoy my whiskey with the food.
>> Correct!

Of course, I have to drink a little, because Tomorrow will be a hectic day for all of us.
>> Correct!
Or: tomorrow

Regarding my assignment, nothing comes to mind about my childhood.
>> Correct!

When I was young, I always didn't have enough money, so I couldn't get any gadgets what I want to.
>> When I was young, I always didn't have enough money, so I couldn't get any gadgets that I want to.

How poor.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!

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