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I think that they are lack of courage.
If they want to help someone, they are hesitate.
And also they worried about harass.
It cursed at for helping.
But if is important to help someone in danger.
Because I can get help one day.

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Thank you for your homework, Ye Lim!

Practice will always make progress.

-Hanna ^^

I think that they are lack of courage.

>>I think that they lack courage.
If they want to help someone, they are hesitate.

>>They would want to help someone but they are hesitant.
And also they worried about harass.

>>And they are also worried that they might be harassed.
It cursed at for helping.

>>They might be cursed for helping.
But if is important to help someone in danger.

>>But it is important to help someone who is in danger.
Because I can get help one day.

>>Because I can also get help from people someday.

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