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What is the most logical reason for becoming a vegetarian?

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2023-04-19 1400

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I don't know the detail reasons about why people become vegetarians so I searched about it.
There were some reasons. First, vegetarians can have vitamin, mineral ..etc that people can't have enough.
Second, becoming a vegetarian is good for heart and blood vessel.
It's because there are a lot of dietary fiber and there are less cholesterol and saturated fat than general meals.
Next, it is good for diet because vegetables accelerate digestion and metabolism.
And, there are a lot of antioxidant in vegetables and fruits so it makes people healthy.
People also can not be exposed from chemical additives because vegetarians don't eat processed food.
Last, vegetarians can reduce the metan gas and environmental pollution from avoiding meat.
Becoming a vegetarian gives a lot of good things to a person and the environment.

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Hello Gem!
Wow this writing was very good. I can see that you did some research. Thank you for your effort. See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I don't know the detail reasons about why people become vegetarians so I searched about it.
>>I don't know, in detail, the reasons about why people become vegetarians so I searched about it.
There were some reasons. 
>>There are some reasons. 
First, vegetarians can have vitamin, mineral ..etc that people can't have enough.
>>First, vegetarians can have the vitamins and minerals that people can't have enough of.
Second, becoming a vegetarian is good for heart and blood vessel.
>>Second, becoming a vegetarian is good for the heart and blood vessels.
It's because there are a lot of dietary fiber and there are less cholesterol and saturated fat than general meals.
>>It's because there are a lot of dietary fiber and there is less cholesterol and saturated fat than general meals.
Next, it is good for diet because vegetables accelerate digestion and metabolism.
>>CORRECT!
And, there are a lot of antioxidant in vegetables and fruits so it makes people healthy.
>>CORRECT!
People also can not be exposed from chemical additives because vegetarians don't eat processed food.
>>Vegetarian are not exposed to chemical additives because they don't eat processed foods. 
Last, vegetarians can reduce the metan gas and environmental pollution from avoiding meat.
>>Last, vegetarians can reduce the methane gas and environmental pollution from avoiding meat.
Becoming a vegetarian gives a lot of good things to a person and the environment.
>>CORRECT!
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