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Korea is the export-oriented country because we don't have natural resources like oil, gold and so on. Our country has developed continuously since Korea-War. We believe that it has achieved because of people's hard efforts. My grandfather generations worked over 12 hours a day because they believe that there would be bright future, if they worked hard and hard. Finally, they made it, it was not just dream. Our major manufactured product was texile goods and then semi-conductor, electronics and mobile phones became country's major exports these days. However, its demands has declined since Covid-pandemic, it resulted in the large scale staff reductions. In addition, we are still under the difficult economic enviroment because most governments has give huge money to all citizens as a emergency subsidies. It lead to serious inflation and many people has lost their jobs. Although, my government tried to increase number of jobs, it wasn't quite effective to create new jobs. They just m

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Korea is the export-oriented country because we don't have natural resources like oil, gold and so on.
>> CORRECT!
Our country has developed continuously since Korea-War. 
>> Our country has developed continuously since the Korean War. 
We believe that it has achieved because of people's hard efforts. 
>> We believe that it was achieved because of people's hard efforts. 
My grandfather generations worked over 12 hours a day because they believe that there would be bright future, if they worked hard and hard. 
>> My grandfather's generation worked over 12 hours a day because they believe that there would be a bright future, if they worked hard and hard. 
Finally, they made it, it was not just a dream. 
>> CORRECT!
Our major manufactured product was texile goods and then semi-conductor, electronics and mobile phones became country's major exports these days. 
>> Our major manufactured product was textile goods and then semi-conductors, electronics, and mobile phones became country's major exports these days. 
However, its demands has declined since Covid-pandemic, it resulted in the large scale staff reductions.
>> CORRECT!
In addition, we are still under the difficult economic enviroment because most governments has give huge money to all citizens as a emergency subsidies. 
>> In addition, we are still under the difficult economic environment because most governments have given huge money to all citizens as emergency subsidies. 
It lead to serious inflation and many people has lost their jobs. 
>> It lead to serious inflation and many people have lost their jobs. 
Although, my government tried to increase number of jobs, it wasn't quite effective to create new jobs.
>> CORRECT!
They just m
>> They just made sure that jobs would be good enough to sustain their way of living.
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