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I think that university is the good place to self expression.
But if it is middle school or high school, it is not good place to self expression at least in Koera.
In my experience, when I¡¯m in high school, my teacher is very closed mind for student.
He is only interested in how can student enter the university. So he doesn¡¯t like play.
So that background is not good to self expression.
But university is good place to self expression.
Many professors like a discuss. Even if they are different to his thought.
So that¡¯s why I think that university is better than high school.

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Thank you for your homework, Ye Lim!

You're doing great so just keep going!

-Hanna ^^

I think that university is the good place to self expression.

>>I think that a university is a good place for self-expression
But if it is middle school or high school, it is not good place to self expression at least in Koera.

>>But if it is in middle or high school, it is not a good place for self-expression most especially in Korea.
In my experience, when I¡¯m in high school, my teacher is very closed mind for student.

>>In my experience, when I was in high school, my teacher was very close minded towards the student.
He is only interested in how can student enter the university. 

>>He is only concerned about how can a student enter into a university.

So he doesn¡¯t like play.

>>He doesn't like to have fun.
So that background is not good to self expression.

>>So that environment is not good for self-expression.
But university is good place to self expression.

>>But the university is a good place for self-expression.
Many professors like a discuss. 

>>Most of the professors like to discuss.

Even if they are different to his thought.

>>Even if they have different thoughts on a topic.
So that¡¯s why I think that university is better than high school.

>>Correct.

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