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What do you think houses/apartments in the future will be like?

작성자: 장*은
2023-04-13 654

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I think the topic is getting harder kk
Houses and apartments are going to be more gorgeous and more convenient than now.
Like behicles, there was a skill of autonomous driving in some expensive cars but now, so many cars have that function.
Everything has changed in accordance with the development of the skill. House is same.
Later, all of the new houses will have the automatic skills like opening the window by clicking the button.
I may change the glass wall into a cement wall. I mean I can make the glass wall look like a cement wall by clicking the button.
I saw that function in a very expensive apartment. New functions like that will be introduced in many new apartments.
And I think the wall is gonna be thicker than now. Many people are suffer from the noise that was happened from the next house.
That problem is very serious in Korea. Some murders have happened for that reason.
Anyway, houses will be develop in the direction of fixing the current inconvenience.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Gem!
Wow! You have a very good imagination. These could really happen in the future. Personally, I want to live in a house that can automatically clean itself because I'm lazy hahaha. Thanks for your fun writing today. See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think the topic is getting harder kk
>>CORRECT! (NOTE: Haha! I'm sorry Gem! I promise it will be easier next time haha. )
Houses and apartments are going to be more gorgeous and more convenient than now.
>>CORRECT! 
Like behicles, there was a skill of autonomous driving in some expensive cars but now, so many cars have that function.
>>Like for vehicles in the past, there was the function of automatic driving that was only available to expensive cars but now, so many cars have that function.
Everything has changed in accordance with the development of the skill. 
>>Everything has changed in accordance with the development of the functions
House is same.
>>It's the same for houses. 
Later, all of the new houses will have the automatic skills like opening the window by clicking the button.
>>Later, all of the new houses will have the automatic functions like opening the window by clicking a button.
I may change the glass wall into a cement wall. 
>>CORRECT! 
I mean I can make the glass wall look like a cement wall by clicking the button.
>>CORRECT! 
I saw that function in a very expensive apartment. 
>>CORRECT! 
New functions like that will be introduced in many new apartments.
>>CORRECT! 
And I think the wall is gonna be thicker than now. 
>>CORRECT! 
Many people are suffer from the noise that was happened from the next house.
>>Many people are bothered by noises coming from their neighbors. 
That problem is very serious in Korea. 
>>CORRECT! 
Some murders have happened for that reason.
>>CORRECT! (NOTE: Oh my God, is this true?!)
Anyway, houses will be develop in the direction of fixing the current inconvenience.
>>Anyway, houses will be developed based on improving the current inconveniences.
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