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2023-04-10 1157

회원님의 영작문

Hello.
It is really Spring today.
I feel the hot air and enough humidity.
Since it's a good weather outside, there were only few clients in the clinic.
The profit of today is not bad though.
These days I am really excited on everytime I think of my Singapore trip.
One of the reason that I like to trip is English.
I will have many chances to use English in other countries.
Before I met you, English is only obstacle to travel, however, it became my pleasure, thanks to you.
Today, there were many kids' patients.
You know what?
I have a good talent to talk with children and their moms well.
I am sure those patients' group are getting bigger and bigger.
Meanwhile, I am also sure that Korea's medical level will be going down.
The goverment and most politicians always want to gain a people's support.
They always treat Korean doctors as an enemy of usual people.
And they are always on the side of nurse and traditional doctor.
Many people in Korea like a story about doctor's criminal.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi there, Dr. Kim!

Spring days are getting longer, flowers begin to bloom, and warmer weather allows us to spend more time enjoying the outdoors with our family. All of your clients and patients who had their procedures are enjoying showing their beautiful faces out there under the sun.

ChatGPT has been one of the best buddies one can have nowadays. It does not only give you answers at an instant, it also planned your itenerary for your travel in Singapore. I am sure it will be yet another blast! As a place of diverse culture, your English will be put to test again but this time, I think you have to listen more carefully because most speakers there also carry strong regional accents. You have enjoyed speaking for many months and this time, there is not much difference. You also have to express yourself well by asking the correct questions as well as explaining a few things when needed. I am so excited for you, your mother, and Irene! 

There is no doubt that communicating with kids is one of your best skills. Your calm voice as well as amiable personality can relax chilren and parents alike making you sort of a derma- pedia doctor. Well, you have unlocked one of your great skills that can be very beneficial to your clinic. I wish you more kid clients for the next coming days.

South Korea is a country where almost every doctor is a specialist. Medical care in your country is considered a social or public good or service and, hence, the government keeps a lid on medical costs. This means, that being a generic doctor or general practitioner without an advanced specialization is not a lucrative career and certainly does not justify spending years and years of grueling study in medical school. This is the reason why your actions are always placed under scrutiny. I just hope that there would never be a grave complain with your treatments. If there would be one, you can manage to solve the matter.

Your composition is packed with information which are meanignful and entertaining to read at the same time. Your grammar displays mastery as well as very good innovation. Thank you for your great efforts. Great job!

See you!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

It is really Spring today.
>> Correct!

I feel the hot air and enough humidity.
>> Correct!

Since it's a good weather outside, there were only few clients in the clinic.
>> Correct!

The profit of today is not bad though.
>> Correct!

These days I am really excited on everytime I think of my Singapore trip.
>> These days I am really excited everytime I think of my Singapore trip.

One of the reason that I like to trip is English.
>> One of the reasons why I like to go on a trip is English.

I will have many chances to use English in other countries.
>> Correct!

Before I met you, English is only obstacle to travel, however, it became my pleasure, thanks to you.
>> Before I met you, English is the only obstacle to travel, however, it became my pleasure, thanks to you.

Today, there were many kids' patients.
>> Today, there were many kid patients.

You know what?
>> Correct!

I have a good talent to talk with children and their moms well.
>> Correct!

I am sure those patients' group are getting bigger and bigger.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I am also sure that Korea's medical level will be going down.
>> Correct!

The goverment and most politicians always want to gain a people's support.
>> The goverment and most politicians always want to gain people's support.

They always treat Korean doctors as an enemy of usual people.
>> Correct!

And they are always on the side of nurse and traditional doctor.
>> And they are always on the side of nurses and traditional doctors.

Many people in Korea like a story about doctor's criminal.
>> Many people in Korea like stories about doctors' crimes.

See you.
>> Correct!
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