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Do you think there should be a law that requires everyone to exercise?

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This is a very interesting question :-).
I am absolutely certain that enacting a law requiring everyone to do exercise will lead to improved health for people.
However, there are followed side-effect by forcing workout to people.
For example, For physically-defective or injured people, pushing them to do excercise can generate
severe accident.
Therefore, in my opinion, enacting a law that requires everyone to exercise is not appropriate
since there are too many types of people to consider.

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Hello there Kate!
Guess what, in 2018, Every Friday, employees of fashion and sportswear retailer Bjorn Borg leave their desks at the company's Stockholm headquarters to get their weekly workout at a nearby gym.
Sometimes, mandatory exercise is needed for young people and for those who don't have underlying conditions. 
Thank you for writing your thoughts.
Aki~

This is a very interesting question :-).
>>>  CORRECT!

I am absolutely certain that enacting a law requiring everyone to exercise will lead to improved health for people.
>>>  CORRECT!

However, there are followed side-effect by forcing workout to people.
>>> However, there are followed side-effects of forcing workouts on people.

For example, For physically-defective or injured people, pushing them to do excercise can generate severe accident.
>>> For example, For physically-defective or injured people, pushing them to do exercise can generate severe accidents.

Therefore, in my opinion, enacting a law that requires everyone to exercise is not appropriate since there are too many types of people to consider.
>>>  CORRECT!

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