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When you are stressed, how do you feel physically?

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2023-04-07 1299

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I'm not a sensitive person so I rarely get stressed out.
And I have no symptoms when I get stressed out I think.
But my father is a very exquisite person.
He is vulnerable to stress and he is stressed easily.
When he is stressful about something, he says nothing about the reason to nobody.
And he eats few of dishes, can\'t sleep well, his weight goes down and his face becomes gray.
My mom looks my father\'s change. Her face becomes gray, too, and she is worried about the
situations that haven\'t happen yet. She often cries because of her imagination.
It is a vicious circle.

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Hello Gem!
Please teach me how to not be easily stressed haha. Anyway, this is a very good showing of your improving writing skills. Keep it up.
~~Teacher Kate 

I'm not a sensitive person so I rarely get stressed out.
>>CORRECT! (NOTE: PLEASE TEACH ME HOW TO DO THAT HAHA )
And I have no symptoms when I get stressed out I think.
>>And I have no physical signs when I get stressed out I think.
But my father is a very exquisite person.
>>But my father is a very delicate person.
He is vulnerable to stress and he is stressed easily.
>>CORRECT!
When he is stressful about something, he says nothing about the reason to nobody.
>>When he is stressed about something, he says nothing about the reason to anybody.
And he eats few of dishes, can\'t sleep well, his weight goes down and his face becomes gray.
>>And he barely eats, can't sleep well, his weight goes down and his face becomes gray.
My mom looks my father\'s change. 
>>My mom notices the change in my father. 
Her face becomes gray, too, and she is worried about the situations that haven\'t happen yet. 
>>Her face becomes gray, too, and she worries about the situations that haven't happened yet. 
She often cries because of her imagination.
>>CORRECT!
It is a vicious circle.
>>CORRECT!
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