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I think it\'s better to have technology

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I think better to have technology
because technology is good things in the wold
and people need always technology
So I think we should always learn technology and get skills

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Hi Da Hye,
Technology has, without a shadow of a doubt, made our lives much simpler and more effective than they were before. Additionally, it has been utilized in numerous ways to benefit individuals. For instance, we are able to accomplish a great deal and complete tasks in a very short amount of time by utilizing everything from smartphones to automobiles. We can also say that, in ways, we couldn't have imagined, life has become quite simple and comfortable for us, and technology has been rising at a very rapid pace and has truly impacted our lives in a huge way in various aspects of our day to day lives
~Teacher Cathy
I think better to have technology
>>I think it is better to use technology.
because technology is good things in the wold
>>It is because technology is a good thing in the world.
and people need always technology
>>And people always need technology.
So I think we should always learn 
technology and get skills
>>CORRECT!
OR>>Therefore, I believe we should always acquire skills and learn technology.
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