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I guess you already know it's to work out. But, I'd love to take about another thing without that. It's an way to think about positive things. Before I realized this, I always used to be depressed and I was a person who is negative. And than I disparaged and undermined others. That was a stupid to do. But now, I've been tried to find good points of others and I'm trying to be positive. :)

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Wonderful day to you, Elic! Utilize every moment to prepare your mind and body for future endeavors. Succeeding in life is easy as long as you believe in yourself. Trust yourself, and success will come along.

I guess you already know it's to work out.
>>> I guess you already know that I really wanted to start going to the gym.

But, I'd love to take about another thing without that.
>>> But, I'd love to do some other things rather than going to the gym.

It's an way to think about positive things.
>>> I want to have a positive mind.

Before I realized this, I always used to be depressed and I was a person who is negative.
>>> Before I realized this, I was a negative person, and I used to suffer from depression.

And than I disparaged and undermined others.
>>> I used to disparage and undermine others.

That was a stupid to do
>>> It was stupid.

But now, I've been tried to find good points of others and I'm trying to be positive. :)
>>> Now, I've been trying to see the good things in other people, and I'm also trying to be a positive person.
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