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Cars effect in many ways in our life
We can go far away then the past, transport the many goods and even we can use as the home
but the problems are not a little It cause the pollution and there is a lot of accident and death has caused because of the Car

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Hello, Sang U! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


Cars effect in many ways in our life
>>> Cars affect our lives in many ways.
 
We can go far away then the past, transport the many goods and even we can use as the home
>>> We can go far places compared to the past, transport various goods and we can even use it as a shelter or a house.

but the problems are not a little It cause the pollution and there is a lot of accident and death has caused because of the Car
>>> But it causes major air pollution and a lot of car accidents and death.
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