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Why do you think it is so difficult for people to give up and quit smoking?

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2023-04-05 658

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Most cigarettes is addictive because of nicotine.
Once a person who smokes a cigarette want to do again regardless of his or her mind.
It becomes more severe whenever smoking again and again.
So person who want to quit smoking need something to help protecting against adictive property of cigarettes.
In Korea, there is the program for no smoking in national health care system.
It provides medicines, patches, and some fake cigarettes (not included nicotine) also for about 8 weeks.
Many smokers success to quit smoking according to this program.
In my clinic, I can also use this program for my patients.
But somtimes, so many smokers don't want to stop smoking.
They feel so happy and even fresh after smoking.
So most smokers smoke immediately after their meals.
I hate smells and smoke of cigarettes.
So I don't want to meet any smoker anywhere.

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Good day, Sir Ji!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Most cigarettes is addictive because of nicotine.
>> Most cigarettes are addictive because of nicotine.
Once a person who smokes a cigarette want to do again regardless of his or her mind.
>> CORRECT!
It becomes more severe whenever smoking again and again.
>> It becomes more severe whenever smoking is done again and again.
So person who want to quit smoking need something to help protecting against adictive property of cigarettes.
>> So a person who wants to quit smoking needs something to help protecting against addictive property of cigarettes.
In Korea, there is the program for no smoking in national health care system.
>> In Korea, there is a program for "no smoking" in national health care system.
It provides medicines, patches, and some fake cigarettes (not included nicotine) also for about 8 weeks.
>> CORRECT!
Many smokers success to quit smoking according to this program.
>> Many smokers succeeded in quitting smoking according to this program.
In my clinic, I can also use this program for my patients.
>> CORRECT!
But somtimes, so many smokers don't want to stop smoking.
>> But sometimes, so many smokers don't want to stop smoking.
They feel so happy and even fresh after smoking.
>> CORRECT!
So most smokers smoke immediately after their meals.
>> CORRECT!
I hate smells and smoke of cigarettes.
>> CORRECT!
So I don't want to meet any smoker anywhere.
>> CORRECT!

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