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What do you think of working abroad? Is it a good idea to work abroad?

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If people would like to extend their knowledge and experience various culture, it would be the best option living or working in other countries. Of course, it will definitely be challenges living abroad, because of the cultural diffrences. I have lived in the UAE for 3 years working at the hospital which was running my hospital in Seoul. I remember that everything from renting a house to doing general affair in city government was really harsh for me due to the language barrier, cultural differences and people's attitude. Locals were not kind toward expatriates. However, it was ok for me living there as time went by because I have learnt a lot. I had adapted very well after I made a lot of mistakes. Based on my experience, if foreginers receive enough salary, it gives numerous chances. It also be valuable experience making foreign friends and it can be good opportunity to be changed their characteristic, if they are introvet. It gives chances for both who want make money, broaden knowl

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

If people would like to extend their knowledge and experience various culture, it would be the best option living or working in other countries. 
>> If people would like to extend their knowledge and experience about various cultures, it would be the best option living or working in other countries. 
OR >> If people would like to extend their knowledge and experience about various cultures, working and living abroad would be the best option.
Of course, it will definitely be challenges living abroad, because of the cultural diffrences. 
>> Of course, it will definitely be challenging to live abroad, because of the cultural differences. 
I have lived in the UAE for 3 years working at the hospital which was running my hospital in Seoul. 
>> CORRECT!
I remember that everything from renting a house to doing general affair in city government was really harsh for me due to the language barrier, cultural differences and people's attitude. 
>> CORRECT!
Locals were not kind toward expatriates. 
>> CORRECT!
However, it was ok for me living there as time went by because I have learnt a lot. 
>> CORRECT!
I had adapted very well after I made a lot of mistakes. 
>> CORRECT!
Based on my experience, if foreginers receive enough salary, it gives numerous chances. 
>> Based on my experience, if foreigners receive enough salary, it gives them numerous chances. 
It also be valuable experience making foreign friends and it can be good opportunity to be changed their characteristic, if they are introvet. 
>> It would also be a valuable experience making foreign friends and it can be a good opportunity to change their characteristics, if they are introverts. 
OR >> It would also be a valuable experience making foreign friends and it can be a good opportunity to change their personality, if they are introverts. 
It gives chances for both who want make money, broaden knowl
>> It gives chances for both who want make money, broaden knowledge, and grab bigger opportunities.
OR >> >> It gives chances for both who want make money, expand their horizons, or take higher offers.
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