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I live in Hwaseong, Gyeonggi-do.
There are a lot of cherry blossoms in Hwaseong now a day.
Hwaseong is famous for its good nature and the tomb of King 'Jeongjo' during the Joseon Dynasty.
The place where King Jeongjo's tomb is located is called 'Yonggeonneung'. Many people tour here.
I sometimes go there, too

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Hi, Gina.
Wow! Thank you for the beautiful photos you've sent. I can really see how beautiful your hometown is.
- T. Caitlyn
I live in Hwaseong, Gyeonggi-do.
>> CORRECT
There are a lot of cherry blossoms in Hwaseong now a day.
>> There are a lot of cherry blossoms in Hwaseong nowadays.
Hwaseong is famous for its good nature and the tomb of King 'Jeongjo' during the Joseon Dynasty.
>> Hwaseong is famous for its beautiful scenery and the tomb of King 'Jeongjo' during the Joseon Dynasty.
The place where King Jeongjo's tomb is located is called 'Yonggeonneung'. 
>> CORRECT
Many people tour here.
>> OR: Many tourists visit here.
I sometimes go there, too
>> CORRECT
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