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1. overwhelm
- I went on a trip with my family to Gangwondo, Korea. At there, I was overwhelmed when I saw a huge waterfall in the old cave. It was very majestic.

2. overcome
- Though I am a nervous wreck when I am doing presentation, I am trying to overcome my fear of talking in front of audiences. I think many preparations and calm mind will be effective.

3. overload
- He is the CEO of the Microsoft. I think he might be overloaded with responsibilities.

4. overjoyed
- I walked with my parents and did volley ball at the park on weekends. I couldn¡¯t come back to my hometown for a quite long time, so it was very precious time for me. I am always overjoyed when I go on a picnic with my family.

5. overcharge
- I don¡¯t like to overcharge when I am buying something, so I compare it from many websites.

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Wonderful job, Emily! Your sentences really prove your prowess when it comes to vocabulary. However, your sentence patterns need a little bit more polishing. Here are some corrections which I have for you:

1st: It's more appropriate to use "When I was there" instead of "At there", because you are talking about the time. 

2nd: Since you used present tense in the beginning of the sentence, you must continue using it for the 2nd part, so you should use 'I try' instead of 'I am trying' which is in present continuous tense. On the second sentence you made, it's appropriate to use adjectives to describe what qualities would be effective for you, such as 'prepared' and 'calm'.

3rd; 'Microsoft' is a proper noun so there's no need to use 'the' for it. You may use 'the' for common nouns such as 'pencil - the pencil' or 'book - the book'. 

4th: "Played volleyball" is more appropriate than "did volleyball". Also, try to put your verbs together so it will not be misleading or confusing for the reader. Since you used past tense in the beginning of the sentence (walked), you must continue it for the last part (last weekend). 

5th: You used 'buying' in the middle part of the sentence, so try to do it for the 1st part as well (being overcharged). The 'prices' are what you are comparing, so mention it at the last part.


Overall, it was a pretty good effort. Good job, Emily!

- Teacher Raven 

1. overwhelm
- I went on a trip with my family to Gangwondo, Korea. At there, I was overwhelmed when I saw a huge waterfall in the old cave. It was very majestic.
>> I went on a trip with my family to Gangwondo, Korea. When I was there, I was overwhelmed by a huge waterfall in the old cave. It was very majestic.

2. overcome
- Though I am a nervous wreck when I am doing presentation, I am trying to overcome my fear of talking in front of audiences. I think many preparations and calm mind will be effective.
>> Though I am a nervous wreck when I am doing presentations, I try to overcome my fear of talking in front of audiences. I think being prepared and calm will be effective. 

3. overload
- He is the CEO of the Microsoft. I think he might be overloaded with responsibilities.
>> He is the CEO of Microsoft. I think he might be overloaded with responsibilities.

4. overjoyed
- I walked with my parents and did volley ball at the park on weekends. I couldn¡¯t come back to my hometown for a quite long time, so it was very precious time for me. I am always overjoyed when I go on a picnic with my family.
>> I walked and played volleyball with my parents at the park last weekend. I couldn¡¯t come back to my hometown for quite a long time, so it was a very precious time for me. I am always overjoyed when I go on a picnic with my family.

5. overcharge
- I don¡¯t like to overcharge when I am buying something, so I compare it from many websites.
>> I don't like being overcharged when buying something, so I compare the prices across different websites.
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