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What are some of the best ways to teach good manners to children?

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Children learn how to become savage and selfish from the people who surround them. In other words, the environments and places where they are close affect their personalities, and also children always copy others' behaviors. To teach good manners to children, they should listen and watch appropriate things for them. Teaching good manners to children is challenging because children eventually listen and watch bad things. When we learn subjects that teaching in school, it is not difficult because we can just memorize them. But learning good manners is different, it may need plenty of time to change from the memory to the actions, or it may not be possible. So, children should listen and watch appropriate things for them and also they should have the ability to judge right and wrong. In conclusion, children have to learn which behaviors are right or not, and adults should show the right behaviors to them. "Behavior is the mirror in which everyone shows their image"(Johann Wolfgang).

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Great examples, Su A! These are indeed some of the things parents and adults alike should do in order to positively influence the children around them. I appreciate the quote you placed at the end as it certainly suits the theme of your essay. However, I would recommend that you place it at the beginning instead as it would serve as a wonderful introductory quote for your readers~  By reading the quote at the start of your composition, readers will get an idea that you are going to talk about how behavior can be mirrored.  Overall, you provided good supporting statements, so well done! 
~T.Harmony <3

Children learn how to become savage and selfish from the people who surround them. 
>> CORRECT!
In other words, the environments and places where they are close affect their personalities, and also children always copy others' behaviors. 
>> ,... and places they are close to, affect their personalities. Apart from that, children have the tendency to copy (or imitate) the behavior of others.
To teach good manners to children, they should listen and watch appropriate things for them. 
>> CORRECT!
Teaching good manners to children is challenging because children eventually listen and watch bad things. 
>> ...because children will eventually listen to and watch sources of bad influence.
When we learn subjects that teaching in school, it is not difficult because we can just memorize them. 
>> When we learn about the subjects being taught in school,...
But learning good manners is different, it may need plenty of time to change from the memory to the actions, or it may not be possible. 
>> ...or it may not be possible at all.
So, children should listen and watch appropriate things for them and also they should have the ability to judge right and wrong. 
>> ...the ability to judge right from wrong.
In conclusion, children have to learn which behaviors are right or not, and adults should show the right behaviors to them. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> ...adults should be an exemplary role model to them.
"Behavior is the mirror in which everyone shows their image"(Johann Wolfgang).
>> CORRECT!
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