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Why do people travel?
>>> There are several reasons that people travel. First of all, they want to relax. Second they want to eat delicious and special food which can be only eaten in that place. Lastly, they want to see beautiful landscape.

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Hello Steve!
Thank you so much for expressing and sharing your thought through writing. Your sentences were executed well but I just need to add missing letters to make them correct! Have a good day and always find FUN in learning.
T. Aki~

There are several reasons that people travel.
>>> CORRECT!

First of all, they want to relax.
>>> CORRECT!

Second, they want to eat delicious and special food which can be only eaten in that place. 
>>> CORRECT!

Lastly, they want to see beautiful landscapes.
>>> CORRECT!


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