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Technology is ver important to our life.
Because our class is doing also develop to technology.
However we also must to wary of the development of technology.
Smart phone is make our life more comfortable.
But it is negative things is exist.
Like a fake news.
It is good for things develop technology.
But we always wary of the technology.

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Thank you for your homework, Ye Lim!

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Technology is ver important to our life.

>>Technology is very important in our lives.
Because our class is doing also develop to technology.

>>Because we can do classes with the help of technology.
However we also must to wary of the development of technology.

>>However we must also be wary on the development of technology.
Smart phone is make our life more comfortable.

>>Smart phones make our life more comfortable.
But it is negative things is exist.

>>But it can also expose us to negative things.
Like a fake news.

>>Correct.

OR: Such as fake news.
It is good for things develop technology.

>>Technology is good and useful.
But we always wary of the technology.

>>But we must always be wary of technology.

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