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When do you say that a person is overexercising?

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Although It is quiet ambigous criterion to judge whether over-excercising or not, we can generally say that a person is over-exercising when a person feels a burden after finishing the excercising.
For example, I make a conclusion as I am overexcercising when i am extremely tired and feel muscle pain.
This pain makes me hard to climbing a stair and walking so it give a lots of burden for my daily life.
Therefore it is very important to confirm a one's work out level and set a proper objective of excercise :-)(I realized this time haha).
Also, it is very necessary to take proper meals to provide fluent nutrition to our body after finishing the excercise since we lose some calories during workout.
Anyway, I feel that I have to take several rest days to recover my body. I will start my next excercise on thursday or friday :-)

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Hi there, Kate!
Thank you for this composition and I am impressed with how you have used your vocabulary.  So for this composition, I am just rewriting and providing you with tiny corrections, especially on spelling and punctuation. In general, you did a wonderful job!
Enjoy the rest of the day!
Aki~
 
Although It is quiet ambigous criterion to judge whether over-excercising or not, we can generally say that a person is over-exercising when a person feels a burden after finishing the excercising.
>>> Although It is quite an ambiguous criterion to judge whether over-exercising or not, we can generally say that a person is over-exercising when a person feels a burden after finishing the exercise.

For example, I make a conclusion as I am overexcercising when i am extremely tired and feel muscle pain.
>>>  For example, I make a conclusion as I am overexercising when I am extremely tired and feel muscle pain.

This pain makes me hard to climbing a stair and walking so it give a lots of burden for my daily life.
>>>  This pain makes me hard to climb a stair and walk so it gives me a lot of burden on my daily life.

Therefore it is very important to confirm a one's work out level and set a proper objective of excercise :-)(I realized this time haha).
>>>  Therefore it is very important to confirm one's workout level and set a proper objective for exercise.

Also, it is very necessary to take proper meals to provide fluent nutrition to our body after finishing the excercise since we lose some calories during workout.
>>>  Also, it is very necessary to take proper meals to provide fluent nutrition to our body after finishing the exercise since we lose some calories during the workout

Anyway, I feel that I have to take several rest days to recover my body. I will start my next excercise on thursday or friday :-)
>>> Anyway, I feel that I have to take several rest days to recover my body. I will start my next exercise on Thursday or Friday 

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