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Is it better to be physically attractive or intelligent? Why?

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It is hard to choose but, if people prefer the outer side, they want to be physically attractive people I guess.
But people who want to be nice internally may want to be intelligent.
It's because people who are physically attractive want to show off to other people instead of self-contentment,
but I think being intelligent is self-contentment thing and for myself like for my career.
So it varies by someone's character.

In my case, I prefer being intelligent than having an attracive body.
Because IQ comes from a gene, and having a smart brain is a talent.
It is easier that someone makes her body more beautiful than being an intelligient people.

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Hello Gem!
I totally agree with you, a beautiful face is not enough to survive in this world or make us happy. Beauty fades but intelligence stays with us longer. Your efforts to write today are well appreciated! Thank you and see you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

It is hard to choose but, if people prefer the outer side, they want to be physically attractive people I guess.
>>CORRECT!
But people who want to be nice internally may want to be intelligent.
>>CORRECT!
It's because people who are physically attractive want to show off to other people instead of self-contentment, but I think being intelligent is self-contentment thing and for myself like for my career.
>>It's because people who are physically attractive want to show off to other people instead of being contented about themselves. However, I think being intelligent gives me a form of contentment about myself or for my career.
So it varies by someone's character.
>>So it varies depending on people's characters.
In my case, I prefer being intelligent than having an attractive body.
>>CORRECT!
Because IQ comes from a gene, and having a smart brain is a talent.
>>It's because IQ is hereditary and being smart is a talent. 
It is easier that someone makes her body more beautiful than being an intelligient people.
>>It is easier for someone to make her body more beautiful than be an intelligent person.
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