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Hi, T.Donna.
I had a tough day.
I fought with my wife this morning.
She didn't keep promises and I blamed her severely.
Of course, she also had bad moments these days, because I was so busy and I couldn't help her with growing our kids.
She told me that she wanted to divorce.
I knew for sure that she didn't really want to divorce.
She just expressed her anger to me, I guess.
However, I got so angry about it, too.
So, I stimulated her many times on our text.
Year, it's my another fault.
In conclusion, I experienced the hell today.
After hard working, I came back home before 30 minutes ago.
She looked so busy helping Irene's homework and doing housework.
And, I drank a little whiskey with a simple food.
As you know, I really love my family.
Thus, after our kids sleep, I will talk with my wife.
Maybe, she had a hard time than I could guess.
If I could make up with my wife tonight, I will tell you about my plan for Singapore trip tomorrow.
I am so sorry about my bad news.
See you tomorrow.

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Good moring, Dr. Kim!

It's completely okay to have some bad days. We all do! Life is filled with highs and lows. Unfortunately, we live in a world obsessed with positivity and happiness. As humans, it is entirely normal to experience negative emotions, have bad days, and feel less-than-amazing at times. Meanwhile, having some arguments in a relationship is healthy and constructive. It allows each person to air views and express themselves without abuse or violence. Fights like this only help the couple to become better people. This only means that you love each other deeply and care about one another's feelings. Just be careful with the word 'divorce'. Once a woman says this, in the future, she may really mean it. By now, I am certain that you have patched things up.

This is why space is essential. Every healthy relationship needs space from time to time. Giving yourselves space that is separate from your relationship allows you to still maintain individuality. Having physical space or uninterrupted time to ourselves allows us to pay closer attention to our emotions. By the way, to remind you, I am not married, so I have no idea if these things work in real life. ^^

I hope that the whiskey helped you realize what you need to do. At times, the best thing to do is- nothing. Wait for some time to heal the negative things you have uttered to each other and live peacefully right after. The storm has passed, the sun will shine.

Neverthless, thank you for sharing your life experience in a concise and clear manner through this writing. I guess it can be therapeutic to write about your day for you to recognize and address how you feel.

See you soon in class!

-T. Donna~


Hi, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

I had a tough day.
>> Correct!

I fought with my wife this morning.
>> Correct!

She didn't keep promises and I blamed her severely.
>> Correct!

Of course, she also had bad moments these days, because I was so busy and I couldn't help her with growing our kids.
>> Correct!
Or: Of course, she also had bad moments these days, because I was so busy and I couldn't help her with (growing/tending/raring) our kids.

She told me that she wanted to divorce.
>> Correct!

I knew for sure that she didn't really want to divorce.
>> Correct!

She just expressed her anger to me, I guess.
>> Correct!

However, I got so angry about it, too.
>> Correct!

So, I stimulated her many times on our text.
>> Correct!

Year, it's my another fault.
>> Yet, it's my additional fault.

In conclusion, I experienced the hell today.
>> In conclusion, I experienced hell today.

After hard working, I came back home before 30 minutes ago.
>> After working hard, I came back home 30 minutes ago.

She looked so busy helping Irene's homework and doing housework.
>> Correct!

And, I drank a little whiskey with a simple food.
>> Correct!
Or:

As you know, I really love my family.
>> Correct!

Thus, after our kids sleep, I will talk with my wife.
>> Correct!

Maybe, she had a hard time than I could guess.
>> Correct!

If I could make up with my wife tonight, I will tell you about my plan for Singapore trip tomorrow.
>> If I could make it up with my wife tonight, I will tell you about my plan for Singapore trip tomorrow.

I am so sorry about my bad news.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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