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Do you ever think taking naps can waste valuable time spent doing useful things?

작성자: 이*아
2023-03-26 97

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In fact, I always regret taking naps instead of doing useful things. There are only 24 hours in a day: usually, I spend 6-8 hours of sleep. Then, I go to school and the academy by using more than half hours of rest the day. Approximately, I just have 6 hours to do everything, such as eating, taking a shower, doing homework, playing games, surfing the SNS, etc. But if I take a nap for 1 or 2 hours, I don't have enough time to do all things that I should do in a day. Nap, which describes as a significant time for boosting to study, etc, however, it is just wasting our life as students. But of course, taking a nap is more valuable than spending time playing games, surfing SNS, or wasting by doing meaningless things. Nevertheless, people, who go to Ivy League, have a certain achievement, etc, said SLEEP, these 5 words ruin our life. Do not sleep, if you want to achieve, and succeed. Spend your time on the most valuable.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

An interesting take, Su A!  I think some people might find it surprising to claim that a nap can be detrimental to our daily life, but students will definitely understand your point. When I was a student, it was also tough to find the time to take naps or to have long hours of sleep because of the tasks needed to be done within the day.  Hence, I agree that if we still have things to do, it's best to do it now. 
~T.Harmony <3

In fact, I always regret taking naps instead of doing useful things. 
>> CORRECT!
There are only 24 hours in a day: usually, I spend 6-8 hours of sleep. 
>> There are only 24 hours in a day, and I usually spend around 6 to 8 hours of them asleep.
Then, I go to school and the academy by using more than half hours of rest the day. 
>> ...the academy by spending more than half an hour of rest per day.
Approximately, I just have 6 hours to do everything, such as eating, taking a shower, doing homework, playing games, surfing the SNS, etc. 
>> CORRECT!
But if I take a nap for 1 or 2 hours, I don't have enough time to do all things that I should do in a day. 
>> CORRECT!
Nap, which describes as a significant time for boosting to study, etc, however, it is just wasting our life as students. 
>> A nap, which is described as a significant time to boost our studies, etc., however, is just a waste of time for students.
But of course, taking a nap is more valuable than spending time playing games, surfing SNS, or wasting by doing meaningless things.
>> CORRECT!
Nevertheless, people, who go to Ivy League, have a certain achievement, etc, said SLEEP, these 5 words ruin our life. 
>> ...said that SLEEP are 5 letters that can ruin our life.
Do not sleep, if you want to achieve, and succeed. 
>> ..., if you want to make achievements, and succeed in life.
Spend your time on the most valuable.
>> Spend your time on the most valuable things.
OR>> Manage your time wisely.
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