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If I were a comfort woman I wouldn¡¯t accept any money from both KOERA and JAPAN governments or the war criminal companies. I will want for JAPAN and Japanese to apologize to all of comfort women and to admit their crime from the bottom of their heart continuously. That is point and they must not forget their crime.

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          If you were a comfort woman, would you accept the money given by Korean companies as your compensation?

If I were a comfort woman I wouldn¡¯t accept any money from both KOERA and JAPAN governments or the war criminal companies. 
>> If I were a comfort woman, I wouldn¡¯t accept any money from both the KOREAN and JAPANESE governments or the war crime companies. 

I will want for JAPAN and Japanese to apologize to all of comfort women and to admit their crime from the bottom of their heart continuously. 
>> I would want for JAPAN and the Japanese to apologize to all of the comfort women out there and to admit their crime from the bottom of their hearts, and that shouldn't be a fleeting feeling of being apologetic and acknowledgment of fault. 

That is point and they must not forget their crime.
>> That is the main point in this issue and they must not forget their crime. 
>> OR: The crux of the matter is that they must not forget their crime. 

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