¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿µ
2023-03-24 781

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

If I were a comfort woman I wouldn¡¯t accept any money from both KOERA and JAPAN governments or the war criminal companies. I will want for JAPAN and Japanese to apologize to all of comfort women and to admit their crime from the bottom of their heart continuously. That is point and they must not forget their crime.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Here's your edited composition, Ju Yeong. 
Thanks for sending it. Speak to you next week!
Happy weekend there to you! 

Cheers,
Jean~~




          If you were a comfort woman, would you accept the money given by Korean companies as your compensation?

If I were a comfort woman I wouldn¡¯t accept any money from both KOERA and JAPAN governments or the war criminal companies. 
>> If I were a comfort woman, I wouldn¡¯t accept any money from both the KOREAN and JAPANESE governments or the war crime companies. 

I will want for JAPAN and Japanese to apologize to all of comfort women and to admit their crime from the bottom of their heart continuously. 
>> I would want for JAPAN and the Japanese to apologize to all of the comfort women out there and to admit their crime from the bottom of their hearts, and that shouldn't be a fleeting feeling of being apologetic and acknowledgment of fault. 

That is point and they must not forget their crime.
>> That is the main point in this issue and they must not forget their crime. 
>> OR: The crux of the matter is that they must not forget their crime. 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
128225 What did you do last weekend? What will you do this weekend? Do... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1195
128224 Which greeting kind of annoys you? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1345
128223 How would you help someone overcome his fears? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1306
128222 What springs to mind when you hear the word ¡®exercise¡¯? ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1203
128221 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 0
128220 What would you do if you started rushing because you thought you... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 939
128219 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 0
128218 What musical insterment do you want to learn to play? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1647
128217 Do you agree with the expression ¡°children should be seen and... ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 4
128216 homework 05.15 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1260
128215 I think they are not good polices. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1049
128214 Homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 2
128213 1. Benito (doesn\'t, don\'t) know the answer. 2. One of my... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1
128212 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1442
128211 Are you pressured by your family to act in a certain way? ÀÌ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1246
128210 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1
128209 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1338
128208 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 1396
128207 11.May.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 2
128206 12.May.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-15 3

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04