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Hey.
It's my worktime, but luckily, I have a vacant time to write my essay.
There were enough number of patients today.
Thus, I am not worried about today's profit.
Meanwhile, I've been depressed from this morning.
I don't know exactly why?
Maybe, I was sick of work somewhat.
However, there will be very interesting event tonight.
To follow your advice, I will drink my whiskey with a raw fish.
As I read your writing, I was so surprised that you played sports with your son yesterday.
That's because Dr. MJ as well played soccer with his nephews last night.
Two of you seem to be very similar in many aspects.
Lately, too many works give me the pressure.
After the seminar on this Saturday, I will be better, I guess.
To be safer, we should stick together in the safe place.
I want my kids to be away from bad people and be smart to distinguish every danger things.
My wife and I have to teach our kids to get the right way always.
Only 25 minutes left to be closed.
I am getting excited.
See you.

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Hello there, Dr. Kim! How's the whisky tonight?

I never thought you would take my advice seriously. ^^ (According to multiple studies, a glass of whisky a day can help reduce your risk of heart disease and heart failure)  I hope that your bloos sugar does not shoot up tomorrow morning.

Since we discussed a negative issue about a family today, it might have affected your mood for the whole day. It may be good to start with some positive news tomorrow.  People may feel fatigued in body or mind. Most of the time, fatigue can be traced to one or more of your habits or routines. Maybe the whiskey can be of help.

Yes, I'm sporty. I love sports, I can move accurately even if I am short. What a coincience with Dr. MJ too! Well, you can enjoy games with your little girls as well with the ones they enjoy. It is already spring time there in Korea, it's time to kick some ball and catch some butterflies.

Finally, safety first. When it comes to being safe, there is no comporomise. You are right. Knowing when a danger is present is the first step for your girls to stay safe.

I am keeping my comments short tonight. Your sentences are combinations of short, long, and compound-complex. Your thoughts are always very clear and interesting. Drink and be happy. 

Good night!

-T. Donna~

Hey.
>> Correct!

It's my worktime, but luckily, I have a vacant time to write my essay.
>> Correct!

There were enough number of patients today.
>> Correct!

Thus, I am not worried about today's profit.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I've been depressed from this morning.
>> Correct!

I don't know exactly why?
>> Correct!

Maybe, I was sick of work somewhat.
>> Correct!

However, there will be very interesting event tonight.
>> However, there will be a very interesting event tonight.

To follow your advice, I will drink my whiskey with a raw fish.
>> Correct!

As I read your writing, I was so surprised that you played sports with your son yesterday.
>> Correct!

That's because Dr. MJ as well played soccer with his nephews last night.
>> Correct!

Two of you seem to be very similar in many aspects.
>> Correct!

Lately, too many works give me the pressure.
>> Correct!

After the seminar on this Saturday, I will be better, I guess.
>> After the seminar this Saturday, I will be better, I guess.

To be safer, we should stick together in the safe place.
>> Correct!

I want my kids to be away from bad people and be smart to distinguish every danger things.
>> I want my kids to be away from bad people and be smart to distinguish every dangerous thing.

My wife and I have to teach our kids to get the right way always.
>> My wife and I have to teach our kids to get to the right way always.

Only 25 minutes left to be closed.
>> Correct!

I am getting excited.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!

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