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There are so many kind of drinks at the convenience store or grocery story.
Among them, I introduce a drink that is popular in South_Korea these days.
These days, zero calorie drinks are the most popular in Korea.
So, many kind of drinks were released, like diet coke.
There are reduce calories by adding seasoning instead of sugar.
It's not complete zero calories, but It's become popular because
it is low in calories. For example, low calorie foods are also popular these days.
The trend started because of people want to eat food, but they are worried about
High-calories.
So, low-calories food and drinks are trending in Korea.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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There are so many kind of drinks at the convenience store or grocery story.
>> There are so many kinds of drinks at the convenience store or grocery store.
Among them, I introduce a drink that is popular in South Korea these days.
>> CORRECT!
These days, zero calorie drinks are the most popular in Korea.
>> CORRECT!
So, many kind of drinks were released, like diet coke.
>> So, many kinds of drinks were released, like diet coke.
There are reduce calories by adding seasoning instead of sugar.
>> There are drinks with reduced calories because they add seasoning instead of sugar.
It's not complete zero calories, but It's become popular because
it is low in calories. 
>> It's not completely zero calories, but it has become popular because it is low in calories. 
For example, low calorie foods are also popular these days.
>> CORRECT!
The trend started because of people want to eat food, but they are worried about
High-calories.
>> The trend started because of people who want to eat food, but they are worried about High-calories.
So, low-calories food and drinks are trending in Korea.
>>  So, low-calorie food and drinks are trending in Korea.
OR >> So, food and drinks with low calories are a trend in Korea.

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