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What are the advantage and disadvantage of taking the risk?

작성자: 김*영
2023-03-20 967

회원님의 영작문

Whenever we try to do something, we can be faced with the risk which works in a good way or bad or sometimes both.
Taking the risk that gives us the advantages or disadvantages.
The advantage of the taking risk is we can be grow up when we overcome the risk we faced with.
When we are confronted the risk, we try to solve the problems and think any solutions to fix it, in that case, even if we couldn't find the solutions, we usually would be mature. Also, when we get over the risk, we could get the better result than before.
And, it has the disadvantage. The risk means "risk" which gives you a hardship and sometimes the situation could be getting worse.
Even if there are the ambiguity to take the risk, i think taking the risk is inevitable moment during the life.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Ellen, 
Taking risks can lead to new and interesting relationships, experiences, places, and knowledge. And unforeseen opportunities may arise that may build confidence and develop new skills. And it also develops a sense of pride and accomplishment.
On the one hand, persons who take risks likely experience negative consequences. The potential for personal economic loss is one drawback. Individuals typically struggle to accomplish their goals readily, and they frequently experience failures. Risk-taking will therefore be detrimental to one's quality of life. ~ Teacher QUENNY.
 Teacher QUENNY.


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Whenever we try to do something, we can be faced with the risk which works in a good way or bad or sometimes both.
Taking the risk that gives us the advantages or disadvantages.
The advantage of the taking risk is we can be grow up when we overcome the risk we faced with.
When we are confronted the risk, we try to solve the problems and think any solutions to fix it, in that case, even if we couldn't find the solutions, we usually would be mature. Also, when we get over the risk, we could get the better result than before.
And, it has the disadvantage. The risk means "risk" which gives you a hardship and sometimes the situation could be getting worse.
Even if there are the ambiguity to take the risk, i think taking the risk is inevitable moment during the life.
>>Whenever we try to do something, we can be faced with risk which works in a good way or bad or sometimes both.
Taking risks will give us advantages and disadvantages.
The advantage of taking risks is we can grow up when we overcome the risk we faced with.
When we have confronted the risk, we try to solve the problem and think of any solutions to fix it, and in that case, even if we couldn't find the solutions, we usually would be mature. Also, when we get over the risk, we could get better results than before.
And, it has a disadvantage. The risk means "risk" which gives you hardship and sometimes the situation could be getting worse.
Even if there is an ambiguity to taking the risk, I think taking the risk is an inevitable moment in life. life.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Whenever we try to do something, we can be faced with the risk which works in a good way or bad or sometimes both.
Taking the risk that gives us the advantages or disadvantages.
The advantage of the taking risk is we can be grow up when we overcome the risk we faced with.
When we are confronted the risk, we try to solve the problems and think any solutions to fix it, in that case, even if we couldn't find the solutions, we usually would be mature. Also, when we get over the risk, we could get the better result than before.
And, it has the disadvantage. The risk means "risk" which gives you a hardship and sometimes the situation could be getting worse.
Even if there are the ambiguity to take the risk, i think taking the risk is inevitable moment during the life.
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