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I love my home.
so I like everything do at home.
because I'm good relationship in my family and I like play games or sleep a nap.
also I know make me relax.

so I like everything I do at home because it make me happy!

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Hi Da Hye,

Family is a significant word that conjures up images of happiness and security. And no matter how big or small the house is where the kids grow up, it will always be associated with happy memories.

~Teacher Cathy

 

I love my home.

>>CORRECT!

so I like everything do at home.

>>So, I like to do everything at home.

because I'm good relationship in my family and I like play games or sleep a nap.

>>Because I have a good family relationship and like playing games or taking a nap.

also I know make me relax.

>>Also, I know that it makes me relax.

so I like everything I do at home because it make me happy!

>>So, I like everything I do at home because it makes me happy!

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