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Should children have curfew? Why or why not?

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If the children, it have to become. It's because I don't think children don't have the time to curfew. And it is dangerous. If some child kidnap by someone, we can't find easily. And they have to grow so sleep early at night.

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Good evening Daisy. :)
Thank you for taking the time to share your opinion regarding this issue. 
I agree that children should have a curfew for safety purposes. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. 
See you again tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry

If the children, it have to become. 
>> [Do you mean]: For young children, they should have curfew. 
It's because I don't think children don't have the time to curfew. And it is dangerous.
>> It's because children don't have mandatory curfew and it is dangerous.
If some child kidnap by someone, we can't find easily. 
>> If a child gets kidnapped by someone, we can't easily find him/her. 
And they have to grow so sleep early at night.
>> In addition, they have to grow so they need to sleep early at night.

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