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Hoarding and Collection

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2023-03-15 202

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They are completely different.
Hoarding is valuable like property.
People need to hoarding for a living.
It just like saving.
But collection is hobby.
They are maybe valuable or not.
Because collection is quite individual.

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Ms. Sunny!
I am quite confused about how you described "hoarding" and people need it for a living. Commonly, hoarding is a negative characteristic. like a person purchasing something even if they don't need it now then they just keep it in their house. Many people who hoard have strongly held beliefs related to acquiring and discarding things. Let's talk about that later.
See you!
Aki~

They are completely different.
>>> CORRECT

Hoarding is valuable like property.
>>> CORRECT

People need to hoarding for a living.
>>>  People need to hoard for a living.

It just like saving.
>>> It is just like saving.

But collection is hobby.
>>>  But the collection is a hobby.
>>> But having a collection is a hobby.

They are maybe valuable or not.
>>> CORRECT

Because collection is quite individual.
>>> Because collecting is quite individual.
>>> Because having a collection is quite personal.
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