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I will define healthy diet is gain mental health.
If I loss weight, it is good for looking. And when I wear a clothes it is more better than before.
But if I lose weight too much, it is not good health. It could be looking good, but inside it would be not good.
Losing weight is good, but it too much is not good. Also gain weight like bulk up is good, but if it is too much eat protein, it is not good for health.
It is good to adequately.

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Hello, Ye Lim!
Thanks for doing your best in writing your homework! 
Have a great day a head! 
-T.Jhozel 
I will define healthy diet is gain mental health.
>> I will define a healthy diet as gaining mental health.
If I loss weight, it is good for looking. 
>> It is good for my appearance if I lose weight. 
And when I wear a clothes it is more better than before.
>> And when I wear clothes it is better than before.
But if I lose weight too much, it is not good health. 
>> However, it is not good for my health if I lose too much weight. 
It could be looking good, but inside it would be not good.
>> It could look nice on the outside, but it would be a disaster on the inside.
Losing weight is good, but it too much is not good.
>> Correct!
OR: Although losing weight is good, too much of it is bad. 
Also gain weight like bulk up is good, but if it is too much eat protein, it is not good for health.
>> Gaining weight to bulk up is also beneficial, but eating too much protein is harmful to one's health.
It is good to adequately.
>> It is good to be adequate.

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